I will talk about notion spaces and exchanges. First of all, I would like to give a definition of this notion. This notion concerns the geographical and symbolic zones that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different societies. Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces. The different cultural, economic, sociological and linguistic interactions have shaped and characterized our modern world.
To illustrate this notion, I will talk about the sabbatical year and try to answer the question "How good is it to take a break to spend a year abroad?" To answer this question question, I will use three-part classroom study document first "go abroad to visit", then "a sabbatical year to work" finally "no inconvenience".
1: go abroad to visit
A sabbatical year is a period during which a student takes a break after completing his studies and before starting college or university. The student may decide to go abroad. I will start with the trip part. We studied in class woofing and couch surfing. These two systems allow you to travel abroad without much cost, to enjoy the landscapes, the culture of the country.
These two systems consist of being fed and housed free of charge against an exchange of services. For woofing, it's traveling and stopping working on an organic farm for a few weeks. The concept is described in one of the documents: in the morning, you have to work, water the plants, feed the animals, and the afternoon is free. Couch surfing works more day-to-day and allows you to take a car trip.
The hosts are checked on websites and most of the time, the reviews are very favorable.
2: A sabbatical year to work
We also studied two other programs. There is au pair and Erasmus. These two programs make it possible to work, one at the university level and the other within a family. Erasmus is an exchange program between different universities around the world.The goal is to take courses in another country to get better acquainted with it and to have experience in certain fields. In "My year abroad was terrible", an article by Annie Foyster published in The Guardians, a 20-year-old woman tells about her Erasmus experience. She says that at first she did not fit in and then she ended up saying that this year was the best thing that could happen to her.
Au Pairing is a program that allows 20 year olds to find a job abroad and take care of children at home for at least 6 months. the goal is to acquire vocabulary and learn the habits of the country. A study shows that you are better learning a language in contact with children. This program is interesting and allows you to learn how families from different backgrounds and countries live. It also allows you to travel to other countries and visit it during your free time. Au pair is the only remunerative program presented here.
3: no problem
The only thing we missed during a sabbatical year may be the family and our habits. These modes of travel have very few disadvantages. Traveling allows you to meet new people, meet locals, practice another language and improve your language skills. It's experiences like this that have to be highlighted on a resume, so you can open doors that could have been closed without those programs.
Ccl: To conclude, the notion "Spaces & Exchanges" is illustrated here by the fact that spending a sabbatical year is an opportunity to discover a new country, to enter another space, to exchange with foreigners, to discover lives , new cultures
I’m going to talk about the notion of Spaces and exchanges. To start with, I’d like to give a definition of this concept: Spaces and exchanges can be material or intangible. Material spaces are the whole Earth, any place you can be there to live (any place where you can live), communicate and make material exchanges which are flow of capital, goods or human using vehicles especially. Intangible spaces are virtual platforms as the Internet where you can communicate and make virtual exchanges, which are the flow of virtual capital and data, like videos, pictures or text. To focus on material spaces and exchanges especially, we will pay attention to the flow dealing with the American Dream, because (. It drew...) it drew lots of migrants to the USA during the past centuries, but today, some people question it (are questioning it). This founding myth helped to promote this new country to European people. The American Dream was the belief that anyone could made a fresh start in America, to be free and rich.
So, we may wonder, to what extend the American Dream has been a hope for migrants? I will concentrate on the last fifteen years, on the way people deal with the American Dream and with immigration, through its pros and cons.
Fareed Zakaria wrote an article untitled “How to restore the American Dream” in which he explores this multi-faceted dream. He explains that when he was a young Indian boy, in the Seventies (70’s) , America seemed dazzling, with huge open spaces and beautiful skyscrapers, through TV shows like Dallas. A few years later, when he came in United States to study, he visited his friends’ hometowns, and he tells he was astonished of the spacious suburban houses people could afford, whenever they had modest jobs. As Zakaria said, the real American Dream of those post-war years was not fancy cars or shining cities, but this middle-class optimism, this sunny attitude people had toward life.
Another example of an immigrant who came to the USA is the one told in the oral comprehension called “A new American”. This immigrant tells us, when he arrived into this new country, he had 67 dollars in his pocket, and he spent about all of his money on the trip to the north of California. Then, he realized he had an opportunity to achieve the American Dream, by working hard. As he says, this hope of a bright future for immigrant has changed, but is still based on the same values. He wanted to earn money to feed his family and to afford a good education for his children, and (. Nowadays…) nowadays, this is the same dream, even if it’s harder to achieve it, because borders have become stricter than in the twentieth century.
Indeed, immigration in the USA today seems to be a real social issue. In a speech delivered in 2015, Barack Obama expresses his desolation about the terrible social conditions faced by migrants in the country. He claims his will to fix this broken immigration system, because of the incapacity to solve this issue from Congress. In fact, undocumented workers lived a constant state of fear, because they are likely to lose their job in everyday-life. Moreover, migrants who try to cross the border between Mexico and USA risk their own life, and thousands of them died every year in this dangerous journey.
Finally, to conclude with the notion of Spaces and exchanges, we saw that the idea of the American Dream is drastically different in people minds. According to Fareed Zakaria, this dream does exist, but is not a fantastic utopia as shown in TV shows, just a peaceful and good living condition. The second immigrant I talked about thinks that the American Dream still exists as he used to, but is harder to achieve today because of the national isolation policy. The speech of Obama proves this idea, because undocumented migrants are less integrated in the American society than before.
gras: faute ou mauvaise formulation
entre parenthèses et en italic: correction.
Conseil: coupe tes phrases. Certaines sont longues et vu que c'est un oral, ça va t'handicaper plus qu'autre chose.
Voilà! J'espère avoir pu t'aider!
réponse :Hey! Je pense que tu devrais plutot dire "indeed, people have always conquered new lands" etc... car tu répètes deux fois "always".
Ensuite la phrase que tu trouvais maladroite, je la formulerais ainsi " These people moves of their countries for better living conditions which are political, economic or social".
Puis dans cette phrase "To have more independance. Her mother decided to immigrate." disons que j'inverserais ce qui donne " Her mother decided to immigrate to have more independance." après ce n'est pas très grave mais c'est plus juste pour la prononciation.
Cette phrase à propos de Nelly Rodriguez je l'écrirais comme ça " Nelly Rodriguez is another example because this student..." etc.
Et puis pour finir ta phrase de conclusion a une petite erreur alors je l'ai corrigé c'est " As a result, we can say that the USA and his greatness..."
Voilà j'espère que je t'aurais un peu aidé, en tout cas ton texte est bien écrit malgré les petites erreurs :)
-Today [...] to speak*
- between human* serait sûrement plus correct vu que "men" c'est le genre et pas l'espèce
- a text wich* explains (vu que c'est une chose) [...] what is* the american dream (même si je pense que ça tu l'as juste oublié)
- "The American Dream is -the idea of making-*" peut-être que ça passerait mieux
- (Je n'ai pas compris la phrase qui suit)
- escape from* their countries, because of the war, poverty, religious persecution [...]
- "the photography of a migrant family*"
- is a photography too* which shows the migrants' identity control
- millions of* people [...] millions of* Americans
- the idea of these* three documents
- [...] the writter (?)
- immigration and problems in USA. Immigrants come for differents reasons (après je n'ai pas compris la phrase)... they all want a better future
- when -you are from an other country-. To conclude, these* three documents integrate the notion of Spaces and Exchanges [...] to give to immigrants the chance of living in a better world.
Voilà, bonne journée !
pour espaces rajoute qu'il peuvent être limité naturellement ou à cause des hommes (villes) et qu'il peuvent être privé ou public. ( the spaces can be limited by the nature or by the human vith the city, this spaces can be public or private)
Today, I'm going to speak about the notion space and exchanges.
First of all, I have to define the notion.
So, I can say that the notion deals with the geographical and symbolic areas that all society occupy and also all the interactions between men/women and different groups in many ways.
The notion can be associated to the theme related to the American Dream.
So we can wonder; and raise this concern. Is the American Dream still alive?
> To illustrate the notion, I have 4 documents.
The first document is a text who explains what the American Dream means. We can see that the American Dream is to make a dream come true. Dreams expected from Asian, Mexican, Irish (Ellis Island) and European immigrants including refugees.
The immigrants flee their home countries from war, from poverty, religious persecutions, or dictatorship.
The second document is a photography of a migrant family who puts its past behind and their home hardships.
We can see a little boy pointing at the statue of Liberty which is the symbol of their expectations.
The third document is a photography again which shows immigrants’ identity control.
The scene takes place at Ellis Island between 1892 and 1894.
17 million people came through Ellis Island and these immigrants are ancestors of 100 million Americans.
The idea of the 3 documents are to show that the American Dream is difficult to access when we are immigrants.
The last document is an article from a blog by the writter of a book entitled "Brotherhood".
The title emphasizes the link among immigration problems in America. They come for different reasons including education and they all wanted a better future/life.
> I have the feeling that the American Dream is difficult to reach when coming from another country. To conclude their 4 documents, integrate the notion of space and exchanges because America exchanges with other countries to give immigrants the chance to live a better world. But we should not forget that the USA is a melting pot of races and cultures.
Your welcome and have a good day!
PS: I am French and I like to speak french.
Today I’m going to talk about the notion of spaces and exchanges.
But first of all, I would like to give a definition of the terms. This notion deals with the geographical and symbolic areas that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different societies. Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces. The different cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have shaped and characterized our modern-day world.
In order to illustrate this notion I have chosen to talk about the globalization, and its consequences, and attempt to answer to the question : what's are the positive and negative aspects of globalization?
To answer this question, I will analyze firstly, the advantages of the globalization, and then, focusing on the disadvantages.
So, the globalization is the opening of national economies thought the world. It is favored by interdependency between countries, who buy and sell their products to each others, relocation and the development of means of transports, and telecommunications.
The advantages of this phenomena are:
-the increase an exchange has produced world growth since the World War Two. Between 1993, and 1994, the human development index average increase.
- There is a faster flow of Information. Their from one part of the world to the other immediately, resulting in the world being tied together.
- There is an increase in quality of goods and services, because people have access to the best quality of goods and services throughout the world. This allows a person in America to wear clothes made in India and Mexico, while watching football match taking place in England on a TV made in China.
- It may be noted the mixt of culture. In fact, when companies relocate abroad, they bring not only modifications in the economic structures but also exercise an influence on societies. For exemple, in UK, Fish and Chips has been replaced by Chicken Tikka Massala has the nation favorite dish.
The disadvantages of the globalization are:
- Environmental degradation: Developed countries can take advantage of underdeveloped countries' weak regulatory laws in terms of environmental protection.
-Unfair working conditions: Many multinationals have been accused of social injustice by exploiting labor in underdeveloped countries in order cut cost., and for using child labor in their factories in underdeveloped countries. Ex: Nike uses child labor along with poor working conditions and low wages in their factories in Indonesia.
-We can also talk about the growthing disparity among the rich and the poor, like the domination of the capitalist countries. In wealthy nation: 1,2 billion people leaves on less than 1$ per day. This phenomena is illustrated on the movie “Slumdog Millionar”: it allows to show the contrast between the poverty of the cans-cities of Dharavi, and the wealth of the high infrastructures of big Mumbai.
To conclude, the globalization detains above all, of various advantages which benefit the increase of the well-being of the population, and of the industries. However, the globalization also detains many limits, which affect the humanitarian aspect, and ethics of the process.
Personally, I am shared enough concerning the globalization. I find this well, in the sense where I can easily order clothes, worldwide, and low-priced. However, I am not all right with the conditions in which certain people (even children) work because of relocation